Thread:Nerdtastic1221/@comment-24675861-20150509174416

You are an excellent writer and you have relieved me as lead biography writer; thank you. I mainly have time to edit, not write.

Stop starting your first sentence section with "After". You can write better than that. Maybe switch it to the thought then put "After so and so" later in the sentence. The amateur writers who appear and disappear in the wiki always write "After he did, they did." You are more skilled than that. In the four articles you updated, you made that error four times...

Thanks again... 