Thread:Phineas Flash/@comment-25692211-20151206005139/@comment-25692211-20151225201234

Sounds great. Also, would you mind giving me a hand with the dialogue in my adaptations?

For example, before the fight in the factory, Wanda and Pietro argue about whether or not Darkhawk is doing the right thing. I'm finding it hard to write Wanda in this scene, since I want her to defend/support Darkhawk without basically beating it into Pietro's head that she is Darkhawk, since it's meant to be surprising to him later on. The audience, and Moon Knight, already know by this point, but Pietro doesn't find out until he fights Darkhawk himself.

This is the conversation so far.

Pietro: Barton wants us to start working as a team again, and I know it's hard. What with this Darkhawk guy running around like he owns the place, but we're gonna show that senseless vigilante how real heroes work, right guys?

Wanda: (Scoffs) Senseless? You leave the city for over a year and don't expect someone to pick up where you left off? Doing something you didn't have the gonads to do?

Pietro: Is there something you want to say to me, Wanda?

Wanda: Yes, there is! You just went AWOL for all this time, and it was pretty ballsy of Darkhawk to do something while you're off on your little vacation. When you took your break, the criminals didn't, and neither did that "senseless vigilante."