Thread:ArakinTheWarden/@comment-25999669-20180910154019

Hi Arakin,

I see you've started writing the Iron Fist biography again following your work after Season One, I'm happy enough with your work but may I make a couple of pointers on how to improve to match with the standards of the wiki. Nothing major so don't worry yourself.


 * Instead of don't, won't, couldn't, we use do not, would not, could not.


 * You have a habit of overdoing full stops, not a major issue, however it makes your writing feel rather short and sharp, use commas instead every now and again to make longer sentences.

For example "As they began heading home, Rand encountered his old friend, Davos. His old friend informed him that he had been in New York ever since discovering that K'un-Lun was gone. Davos wanted to talk to Rand alone." This could be "As they began heading home, Rand encountered his old friend, Davos, who informed him that he had been in New York ever since discovering that K'un-Lun was gone and wanted to talk to Rand alone."


 * When you start a new header, you need to restart using links to the other pages. For example you just wrote the "The Broken Parley" header without any links, despite Colleen Wing and Sherry Yang being mentioned among others. They should not be linked every time they're mentioned under the header, but just the first time.

I hope this all makes sense, like I said I don't disapprove of your writing at all, I just wanted to make some small tips on improving it. 