Thread:Shabook/@comment-3164086-20141217065819/@comment-112155-20141227004650

Once again, I've been forced to rewrite and undo most of your edits in that article.

There were lots of casual language and direct quotations, something strongly discouraged while redacting an article, and many rewordings were less accurate than what was stated.

But what made the edit clearly unappropiate was to intertwine the different events. Movies change from a scene to another to let the viewer know that they were concurrent, but for the purpose of this wiki, events cannot be intertwined in a History section, and each event must be told in an individual subsection.

If you want a suggestion, instead of making sudden changes that may end up being undone, try making small changes section by section, in order to let other editors easily review them and make them match to the wiki's writing style.