Board Thread:New on Marvel Cinematic Universe Wiki/@comment-112155-20150706203810

Sometimes (Many times), editors begin their articles or paragraphs with the repetitive formula "After this happened, that happened". Then a rewrite tag is added, asking to remove the "After", and users, in all their good faith, simply change that after for a similar word ("When", "Following", "Once").

However, as it should be obvious, the problem is not solved, but changed. In these cases, the rewrite tag does not only mean that the "after" Word must be removed, it means that the whole paragraph must be restructured, and the different ideas or facts that are expressed must be addressed in other ways.

Let's illustrate it with an exxagerated example:

"When I felt sick, I visited the doctor. After the doctor explained me the illness I was suffering, I bought some medicines. After taking the medicines, I rest for two days in my house. Following these forced holidays, I was able to return to my job".

That kind of paragraph would surely be marked as in need of a rewrite, and changing one Word to another doesn't mean the problem is solved. The different facts explained in the paragraph must be rearranged, and something like this would be a way to solve the problem.

"''I started to feel sick, and being unable to work, I had to visit the doctor. He explained that I was suffering an illness and recommended to take some medicines. I went to a pharmacy and bought them, just to take them as soon as I got home.

I had to spend two days resting until I finally get rid of the illness, and then I was able to return to my job''".

I hope this helps both new and regular editors what we mean with those "removing the after" notes... 