Thread:Nerdtastic1221/@comment-33810813-20190208173318/@comment-25999669-20190208174641

The point of the intro is that it's short and concise, yours is overly detailed and therefore got trimmed down. The intro should not explain every scene the character is in, who they fought and the outcome of the fight. It should explain who they are, what their mission is, and what their situation is by the end of the narrative.